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"One unique life" by bigtatertot93

this is a summery on my life with autism

Category: Poetry

Tags: autism

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These roots are different than most

They dig deep into this child’s life

Dug in places people would prefer not to go

They are made from a confused eye of a young child

Eyes covered by an unknown tinted lens

Unknown to the child and the people around


He tried to do as others could but couldn’t

People tried to help but the people where often wrong

Diagnosed to have many problems but no one knew the one that is correct

Given bad candy that is said to help

One piece turns to three, three to five, and five to seven

They made changes but not for the better


His view on life was taught to him by his creator and by the creator’s creator

Some say right some say wrong

The child couldn’t speak himself for that is all he was told

An unused time forgotten and hardly remembered

He did what he did unknowing that it is wrong


He was a few pieces short of a full set

Ridiculed and an outcast by his peers

Over looked and seen useless by his teachers

Loved and misunderstood by his family


Here he was brilliant but there he is a total fail

Knew what he loved and did it great

Unknowing of the demands and he fell behind

Knowing they where there but looked the other way

Not knowing it was needed to move on his way


Month to month then year to year, all of this was his childhood

Autism is the glass that held him back

But the window is broken and he has stepped out


Life he never knew he could have

He knew it was there and he learned from his mistakes


Not all is perfect, at least for now

An unseen path now is his

Past is vivid but not forgotten

He has learned of the bad side of life and see’s the good

Still held back by the tinted lens


Having to learn what he deemed useless

Seeing that the stick was indeed a tool

Moving faster than he ever did

The boy is now a teen


Not knowing what to make of life

Walking the path as he was told

He could walk but his side is broken

Just to see things and be told he would never have them

Material things and rums to his ladder of life


People seen as friends are truly enemies

What was thought as fun was truly cruelty

Trust misused as fun

Friendship was a trapped area


A new school was right next door

It was thought it was fun but it truly was a place of pain

Emotions ran high and feeling where low

Pain day in pain day out

It truly hurt this young man

But unknowing to him it was a blessing in disguise


From this hell came redemption

A higher place that would help him

People now knew what he was

They started to help and they succeeded



The boy learned this slowly but surely

His life is in order

The tinted lenses are now in his control

His life is his and no one else’s


He knows the right and avoids the wrong

Seeing it all unfold from bad to good right before his eyes

The taught responsibility is now sewn in


On his way to manhood knowing he has a lot to learn

Ready to face life challenges one step at a time

His path is now truly his, walking it unhindered


Month to month then year to year, all of this was his childhood

Autism is the glass that held him back

But the window is broken and he has stepped out









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Category Name: My Thoughts

I didn’t care for this poem at all. It lacked originality, purpose, good word choice, or was otherwise uninteresting. This poem was okay. It would have been better if the poet had given the theme, word choice, or form more careful thought. This poem was great. The form and word choice seemed natural and added to the main idea the poet was putting across.

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Category Name: Theme / Subject Matter

The poet does little to make the theme or subject matter seem important to me. There are some cool things about the way the theme or subject matter is handled, but it could use more originality or clarity. The poem makes the subject matter new and exciting. Even if the subject matter is ordinary, the poet gives it a new angle.

Is the subject or theme poetry “worthy?” Is it original? Is the subject treated in such a way that makes it interesting, funny, creative, beautiful, surprising, enlightening or otherwise worthwhile? Ordinary subjects make for great poetry if they are treated in an original way, and great subjects make for bad poetry if they are just like every other poem written about it.

Category Name: Word Choice

The words chosen for this poem are dull, contrived, or hastily chosen. The words seem almost right, but there may be some wrenching or some words that don’t quite fit into the overall idea. The words choice is great. The words seem exactly right to convey the theme. They are beautifully or creatively chosen, surprising or exciting.

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Category Name: Form & Structure

This poem seemed spewed onto the page without any thought given to form of any kind. The poem has been thought out, but doesn’t quite fit the form or seems a little forced or unnatural in some places. The poem naturally conforms to the form, or the free verse takes meter, enjambment, etc. into consideration in an effective way.

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Category Name: Mechanics

The poet seems to have taken little or no thought for the punctuation in this poem. The poet has some really interesting things going on with the punctuation or line length, but it could be more exciting or surprising, or it could be scaled back to be less distracting. The punctuation compliments and adds to the meaning of the poem’s words or theme. It is deliberate and well thought out.

Punctuation (or lack there of), line breaks, enjambment, capitalization, lineation, etc. Not everyone can be e.e. cummings and eschew all punctuation and convention of line, but poetry doesn’t always need to follow strict grammar rules either, as long as whatever punctuation is or is not used adds to the overall idea of the poem.

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1. These roots are different than most

2. They dig deep into this child’s life

3. Dug in places people would prefer not to go

4. They are made from a confused eye of a young child

5. Eyes covered by an unknown tinted lens

6. Unknown to the child and the people around

7.

8. He tried to do as others could but couldn’t

9. People tried to help but the people where often wrong

10. Diagnosed to have many problems but no one knew the one that is correct

11. Given bad candy that is said to help

12. One piece turns to three, three to five, and five to seven

13. They made changes but not for the better

14.

15. His view on life was taught to him by his creator and by the creator’s creator

16. Some say right some say wrong

17. The child couldn’t speak himself for that is all he was told

18. An unused time forgotten and hardly remembered

19. He did what he did unknowing that it is wrong

20.

21. He was a few pieces short of a full set

22. Ridiculed and an outcast by his peers

23. Over looked and seen useless by his teachers

24. Loved and misunderstood by his family

25.

26. Here he was brilliant but there he is a total fail

27. Knew what he loved and did it great

28. Unknowing of the demands and he fell behind

29. Knowing they where there but looked the other way

30. Not knowing it was needed to move on his way

31.

32. Month to month then year to year, all of this was his childhood

33. Autism is the glass that held him back

34. But the window is broken and he has stepped out

35.

36. Life he never knew he could have

37. He knew it was there and he learned from his mistakes

38.

39. Not all is perfect, at least for now

40. An unseen path now is his

41. Past is vivid but not forgotten

42. He has learned of the bad side of life and see’s the good

43. Still held back by the tinted lens

44.

45. Having to learn what he deemed useless

46. Seeing that the stick was indeed a tool

47. Moving faster than he ever did

48. The boy is now a teen

49.

50. Not knowing what to make of life

51. Walking the path as he was told

52. He could walk but his side is broken

53. Just to see things and be told he would never have them

54. Material things and rums to his ladder of life

55.

56. People seen as friends are truly enemies

57. What was thought as fun was truly cruelty

58. Trust misused as fun

59. Friendship was a trapped area

60.

61. A new school was right next door

62. It was thought it was fun but it truly was a place of pain

63. Emotions ran high and feeling where low

64. Pain day in pain day out

65. It truly hurt this young man

66. But unknowing to him it was a blessing in disguise

67.

68. From this hell came redemption

69. A higher place that would help him

70. People now knew what he was

71. They started to help and they succeeded

72.

73.

74. The boy learned this slowly but surely

75. His life is in order

76. The tinted lenses are now in his control

77. His life is his and no one else’s

78.

79. He knows the right and avoids the wrong

80. Seeing it all unfold from bad to good right before his eyes

81. The taught responsibility is now sewn in

82.

83. On his way to manhood knowing he has a lot to learn

84. Ready to face life challenges one step at a time

85. His path is now truly his, walking it unhindered

86.

87. Month to month then year to year, all of this was his childhood

88. Autism is the glass that held him back

89. But the window is broken and he has stepped out

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