"Table For Four" by jadeoshow
Team of FBI Agents solve crime- This is a newer version of an old copy floating around the sight
Category: Book: 1st Chapter
Tags: Crime, Fiction, Drama, Procedural
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yinarchy - Oct 16, 2011









(5 stars)
more »I could not get a clear picture of what was going on. There should at least be a description of the murder victim at the beginning. Male? Female? How old? I could not tell if it was just the man or a man and his wife who were murdered.









(4 stars)
more »While there was lots of interplay among the characters, introducing four at once left me a little confused. Maybe if you stagger introductions in the story.









(6 stars)
more »I think you could begin with more action, then introduce the characters as it goes on.









(4 stars)
more »Because the victim was never described, except for having a thermonitor stuck some place. it ruined the setting. Kinda like the elephant in the room.









(7 stars)
more »The mechanics are good, but the structure needs reworking.









(8 stars)
more »The dialog was well written, but rather dull. I suggest slowing down on the characterization and stepping up the action.